BR 1-18; Storm Castle

(Story)
Nadim’s mum and dad had to go away. So, Nadim came to stay at Biff and Chip’s house. Biff, Wilf, Chip and Nadim went to Biff’s room. They played on the computer. One of Nadim’s new games was called “Storm Castle.” It looked exciting. Suddenly, the magic key began to glow and they went to somewhere. And they arrived Storm Castle. But, magic key didn’t take them inside the castle. “Why didn’t the magic take us inside the Castle?” said Wilf. But, everyone didn’t understand about it. So, they run away. “Let’s go into Storm Castle.” said Biff. They try cross a bridge. But, the bridge began to open in the middle. So, they jumped across. Suddenly, the gate of the castle was closing. Narrowly, they entered the Storm Castle. They came to three doors and didn’t know which one to open. “ I think we should go through this one.” said Wilf. Nadim open the door. The room there are a lot of mirror. So, the mirrors made them look so funny that they all laughed and laughed. Suddenly, the monster appeared at the mirror. They was surprised . The monster was friendly and he taught them about map of the maze. And he was disappeared. They went into the maze. “I think we went wrong at the last turning.” Said Biff. Wilf remembered the monster’s map. And, they win free and escape. Next, they came to a hall with squares on the floor. The floor troubled them. Then, they came to a new room and they found the big robot. Nadim was sitting inside the robot. “How did you know I was inside here?” said Wilf. “The reason that you wrote a story about this robot at school.” said Chip. “Well done, Chip” said everyone. Suddenly, the magic key glowed and they return home.


(remark)
I felt that this story is so –so. But, I felt that this book doesn't see the talk. So, this story haven’t exciting.

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